When I was in first grade I was ten years old. I was attending my first day of class and I observed that all my classmates had different hairstyles such as: Ricky Martin, Tom Cruise, Brad Pitt, and some othersno -s celebrities. I thought to myself that I needed a hairstyle that would make me shine in the classroom. I wanted something original and that nobody would have in school. Then, the movie “Titanic” came to theaters and one of the main actors named Leonardo Dicaprio had an old hairstyle that I liked. BNut my hair wasn’t long enough to comb it all the way to the right side and leave a curve shape with the my front hair. So I tried to use the hairdryer and some gel to make the look. After a month I was tired of useding the hairdryer and some gel every time I gowent out and I was feeling too hot because it was summer time so I decided to cut my hair short.

I cut it spiky style. This style was to leave the top part long enough to spike up with some gel. It was more convenient because I washed my hair easily, used less gel, and it attracted the attention of a lot of people. There was a girl, Raquel, who liked my hairstyle a lot in my school. She went out with me a couple of time and became my first girlfriend because of my hairstyle. I liked this hairstyle but I was feeling that I still needed some changes.

Three months later my friend advised me to dye my hair blonde but I didn’t like to have all my hair blonde. I decided to have some highlights instead. I went to my best friend’s home to have my hair dyed because her sister knew how to do it goodwell and it was cheaper than going into a salon. I told her that I wanted something that would look good on me so she put some dye chemicals on three parts of my front part hair. It itched meomit a lot because the chemicals dripped into my scalp. I had to wait for fifteen minutes before washing the chemicals off. After I washed my hair, I saw the highlights shining on me. My girlfriend Raquel liked it but her parents didn’t like it all because I looked like a gangster so they separated us. Also my parents complained about it too so I told them that I would cut my hair when it grew back because I didn’t want to waste my money by cutting it so quick and I wanted to show it off a bit. As a result, it was a bad change I made because I lost my girlfriend and my parents were angry for being disobedientyou don't explain at all about your parents being angry--that's an important point..

After a couple of months my hair again, I need a hair cut because the highlights were looking ugly and my parents kept on telling to cut it but I didn’t know what style to get. I had two options. One of the options was to cut it skin face style which was to cut everything of the bottom, leaving it bold, and the top part leave it around two to three inches long. The other option was to keep up with spiky hairstyle but without the highlights. I decided to cut it spiky again because it this style the best things had come to me and if I cut it skin face style then my friends would have laughed at me and called me a monk.

Posted at Oct 31/2004 11:25 AM:
Admin: This is a good description of the troubles you had with your hair, but you left out any explanation or more general points. Even the details that would really support those points (your parents' anger, for example) are missing. There are also some serious problems with the proofreading.

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